Thread:Ashleyien/@comment-918376-20150707020140/@comment-918376-20150717224444

Yeah, they changed that at the last minute, though. In the anime, his favorite food was pizza, but in the light novel, it's sushi, since pizza was TMNT Leonardo's (or one of the turtles') favorite food.

I used to have the same problem as well (if you look through our conversation, I've probably done the same thing). I hope you don't mind that your documents will probably be filled with suggestions, since it's likely going to happen. I think the story's fine, actually, just the issues that I've mentioned earlier. With the clothing descriptions ... I might write my own version below yours', so maybe it sounds a bit more in-character? Clothing description isn't really my favorite thing and I tend to skim over it (well, I tend to do that with huge blocks of text, no matter where it is), but it has a bit of the mechanical feeling that I've mentioned.

The characters are actually pretty in-character despite your doubts about them. I especially like the part about Akatsuki and Tet being friends. It's a really nice touch, and it honestly wouldn't feel out-of-place if it was put into the LN.