Thread:Ashleyien/@comment-918376-20150707020140/@comment-26580819-20150721025238

Okay thanks. :)

Well it didn't feel right to leave out the little sister who lives there. I also wrote that a couple of years back, though I can't remember exactly when. I probably could look it up but it's not that important. Kei didn't have a big part either, but in his defense, he was at work for most of it.

I've had people in my local NaNo group look at that story at one point when they decided to have a critique group (concidering one other person and myself were the only ones who bothered to read anything and all anyone else did was use it as an opportunity to socialize, it didn't last long. Anyway, she didn't correct my commas or anything like that. Her critiques were "you should change it to say Justin ate like a pig at trough to show his messy nature"... but just because his room is a mess doesn't mean he's a sloppy eater. I was also told that one twin can't be depressed... if one is then the other would be too (I have done research previously and that's not the case - they might be more prone to depression but twins don't have to be depressed together). I can't remember the other comments off-hand but that's the kind of critiques I usually get and I didn't really find it helpful.  You've seen some of the comments I've gotten from someone else in the group (though she wasn't in the critique group) on my Milkshake story.

It still amuses me that I have a character named Kei Kogane that was the leader of the group that ended up in another world and had to find a way home...after first saving the world (of course he gets home since the sock story takes please like 15 years later). I really don't want to change his name, since I like it and it's been that way for years now so I'm used to it, but though it amuses me, I worry that it's a little too close to Kei Shirogane (even though I didn't know about LH until this year so it was no way influenced by it). XD

I still have about 100-200 words to write tonight. I'm just not focused. I did end up watching part of Season 1, ep. 8 to see if that restaurant had a name (then of course I watched for a little longer).