Thread:Ashleyien/@comment-918376-20150707020140/@comment-26580819-20150821152220

It's fine.

True. I didn't notice Nao give a lot of examples. If you think of anything to add to make it sound more like him while you're read Truth or Dare, please do suggest it. Again the more I think about the story I'm currently working on, the more I don't like it. I think at some point (maybe Sat. night or Sunday since I work today and I'm busy tomorrow afternoon - writer's group) I need to read over it all and see what I can do to fix it. It's almost all Tet's POV so far... the part that's Nao's I'm totally scrapping (though I did 1k words for it yesterday at lunch) and starting over.

With Tet, it's not only fan translations & online translators, but the fact that nothing has been told from her POV so far, so all we have is her dialogue (mostly with Nao) to go by as to how she might think... and since most of what she says is part of her act... I'd like it if something in vol. 12 (or if part of vol. 11 goes back to Shiroe & co.) to be from her perspective. Anyway, Tet did use an example of a grade schooler caught writing a love letter to a teacher, so she does use examples too. Just most her lines are "I'm a beautiful galactic idol. I'm so perfect! Don't fall in love with me!" type things.

Yes, if you complain things seem to happen! So the side-story might not be by Marmare? How do the side-stories usually work?

edit: O.O my avatar is gone!! What happened? I can't play around with it at work either.