Thread:Ashleyien/@comment-918376-20150707020140/@comment-918376-20150719230526

If you think the page is fine, then leave it. You can probably keep on editing as you please and if there's something that's an issue, I'll mention it.

Most of my issues with it are just cases of personal taste; I'm not very fond of the "boy dresses as girl, gets mistaken for a girl without hesitation" trope (and the other way around) in general. From my experience, those kinds of situations are usually more ambiguous and "that person COULD be a girl ... or a boy ... or both/genderfluid." I've seen more girls successfully pose as guys (with the help of makeup), but not so much the other way around. However, taking your story into account, I think it works. The biggest issue is where people live; I don't know where Maryelle and Henrietta live at the moment, or where Tet lives in real life. That's probably the only thing that's close to being "contrived", but we don't know where they canonically live, so it gets a pass.

Don't worry about length. I was just out for most of the day and didn't have the time to respond. I mean, my description of only Tet's side of the day after was probably just as long.