Thread:Ashleyien/@comment-918376-20150707020140/@comment-918376-20150716174244

Gah. Critiquing is hard. It's either always positive, without much real feedback, or just negative without providing ways of solving the problem. (Then again, FF.net isn't the best place to actually critique works, although I have seen some people do it.)

I can't write in first person for my life. I find it difficult to follow stories that are written in first person, too.

Does he know he met real-life Tet, or is that a secret, too? Just like "Hey, I've met a person that acts a bit like this," or "Wait, you're that person?!"

The Genius are basically in hiding. It's because the Pioneers are reincarnating that Kinjo is becoming more worried about the Genius, because some strange things are happening to the world again, and Kinjo's afraid that if the Genius view the Pioneers as a threat again, they might wreak havoc like before.