Thread:Ashleyien/@comment-918376-20150707020140/@comment-918376-20150718043950

I lose interest at the drop of a hat. It's such a bad habit ... I always come up with ideas for original fiction, but never go through with them because I lose interest within a couple of chapters, or once I hit a roadblock.

I'm sure more than half of them are just comma placements. I wish there was a way to group suggestions together or something so they dont eat up so much space.

Likely, Mari drinking too much alcohol can be saved away by the dact that Henrietta was too busy cuddling Akatsuki and forgot about Mari until things escalated too far. That way you don't have to change anything if you don't want to.

If you're not liking where the other story/sequel is going, you could redo it from scratch with the panacea explanation. But you could probably explain it away with either "they forgot because of everything that happened" or "it's a punishment".

Did the kids get woken up by the noise? The story makes it clear that they can hear things that happen outside of the room (when Tohya knocks on Nao's door), but I don't know if they could hear all that was going on outside.