Thread:Ashleyien/@comment-918376-20150707020140/@comment-26580819-20150718041836

I rarely finish stories, mostly due to the fact they usually end up really long and I lose interest/focus. I only have a couple of other ones done. At least you edit... I don't get that far in any of them. I'm thinking I really don't like this story... I want to start over.

Typos are about the only thing I'm good at finding in other people's work. I'm not very good at being critical. Yeah, your comments are longer than the story (at least at the side of it, I have to keep scrolling down once the story ends). It probably needs all of them though.

Sorry about OOC Marie. Maybe no one noticed how much she was drinking. Should I change that?

Yeah, Nao doesn't know which one it is so it's ambiguous (though she did need help).

And I never thought of that (or realised that they existed). Which means I can re-do this story which starts the next day and have them take one of those instead of spending the morning in bed... but maybe they like staying in bed or the others decide it's a good punishment and hope they won't over-drink again. I don't know...